As I walk towards the railing to see the sunset I hear the children running past me. When it was my turn to get on I saw a huge stair and big lights shining through the room. I see the children getting excited, the parents getting all of their suitcases ready to go into their cabin. I can see the food getting cooked and the waves crashing, the wind blowing and the sun shining. As the time goes it gets dark and cold really quickly. I walked downstairs and saw that the cafe was open, I went in. I just remembered that I forgot my wallet in my jacket. As I was walking there, I hear a big boom. I went to the top to see what it was, I can see water coming in fast. I better go to the top as everyone was at the top. My heart began to pound faster and faster, I see that every female was going to the emergency boats. Well it was my turn, I feel like everyone was so scared. Behind me as he hit the water the two females started to paddle way, I can see that people are jumping off the boat. As we got far enough I see that some of the males had to stay on the boat, as time goes the titanic sunk under water. I see the light flickering, people were trying to see if anyone was alive so we stand up to see if we could get their attention. It got really dark and really cold fast, I hope they will find us, the star sprinkles through the sky and the moon is shining.
BY ALLIE
Kia ora Allie, Your writing shows that you have researched The Titanic story throughly including facts and how people felt as the disaster unfolded. You have used punctuation well- it would also help if paragraphs were used to show the different parts of your story. Thanks for choosing a creative way to share your learning about such a tragic event.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Allie I really like your Titanic writing. You have put heaps of
ReplyDeletegood information about the Titanic. And you have got heaps of detail about it the Titanic. you have used punctuation and full stops
by Skyla.